Hey , I really like how you added your first language into your writing. I know other people who like netball too. What you could improve is add more detail.
My name is Coralee and I am part of the Kia Manawanui Syndicate. I would like to say keep up the good work and I hope you get the job you wanted in the future. But I must say nothing comes true on you're own so try you're best!
Hi Vaiola, Im Carra and I am in the Kia Manawanui syndicate I liked how you were able to write your all about me presentation in your first language which was very cool. Something you need to improve on are your capital letters because some of the them you don't have in the right space. But Try your best and you will succeed.
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ReplyDeleteHey , I really like how you added your first language into your writing. I know other people who like netball too. What you could improve is add more detail.
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ReplyDeleteNice job I like that you included your first language to your work
ReplyDeletehey, i really liked how u did your first language in your writing and what could u improve on in your writing
ReplyDeleteHi Vaiola,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Coralee and I am part of the Kia Manawanui Syndicate. I would like to say keep up the good work and I hope you get the job you wanted in the future. But I must say nothing comes true on you're own so try you're best!
Hi Vaiola,
ReplyDeleteIm Carra and I am in the Kia Manawanui syndicate I liked how you were able to write your all about me presentation in your first language which was very cool. Something you need to improve on are your capital letters because some of the them you don't have in the right space. But Try your best and you will succeed.
Hi Vaiola,
ReplyDeleteI liked how you wrote in your own language and you expressed yourself.
Hey, Vaiola Well done do an excellent job explain anything about your self
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